托福寫作十宗罪

托福寫作十宗罪，這些錯(cuò)你犯了幾條?快來看看吧，下面小編就和大家分享，來欣賞一下吧。

托福寫作十宗罪，這些錯(cuò)你犯了幾條?

1、不一致

不一致(Disagreements)除了主謂不一致之外，還包括數(shù)的不一致、時(shí)態(tài)不一致及代詞不一致等等。

例如： Watching TV too much are bad for our eyes.

看電視太久會(huì)對(duì)我們的視力造成傷害。

剖析：不定式、v-ing形式充當(dāng)句子主語時(shí)，謂語動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)形式。本句是典型的主謂不一致。同學(xué)們?cè)诳紙?chǎng)上難免緊張，很容易無意識(shí)地犯下這種不該犯的錯(cuò)誤。建議同學(xué)們留出10分鐘左右的時(shí)間，逐句檢查。

改為：Watching TV too much is bad for our eyes.

2、句子不完整

寫作和口語有一個(gè)極大的不同之處，就是在口語當(dāng)中，說話人即使表達(dá)不完整，聽者也能通過上下文語境、手勢(shì)、表情等，理解對(duì)方的意思?？墒菍懽鲄s不同，句子結(jié)構(gòu)的不完整(Sentence Fragments)會(huì)令意思表達(dá)不清，可能使讀者二丈和尚摸不著頭腦。這種情況經(jīng)常會(huì)發(fā)生在寫完一句句子之后，筆者又想對(duì)前面一句話添加一些補(bǔ)充時(shí)發(fā)生。

例如：There are many ways to learn English. For example by reading English novels, listening to English radio, taking courses and so on.

剖析：后半部分“For example ……and so on .”不是一個(gè)完整的句子，僅為一些不連貫的詞語，不能獨(dú)立成句。

改為：There are many ways to learn English, for example by reading English novels, listening to English radio or taking courses.

3、懸垂修飾語

懸垂修飾語(Dangling Modifiers)是指句首的短語與后面句子的邏輯關(guān)系混亂不清。

例如：To help raise people’s living standards, basic healthcare is a necessity.

剖析：句中不定式短語 “To help raise people’s living standards” 的邏輯主語不清楚。

改為：To help raise people's living standards, the government should provide basic healthcare.

4、不間斷句子

不間斷句子(Run-on Sentences)指的到底是什么呢?請(qǐng)看下面的例句。

例如：There are many ways we get to know the outside world.

剖析：這個(gè)句子包含了兩層完整的意思：“There are many ways?！?以及“We get to know the outside world.”但簡(jiǎn)單地把它們連在一起就不太妥當(dāng)了。

改為：There are many ways for us to learn about the outside world. 或：There are many ways through which we can become acquainted with the outside world.

5、詞性誤用

詞性誤用(Misuse of Parts of Speech)指的是考生在寫作的過程中，不考慮單詞的詞性和詞法功能，單純地從詞義對(duì)照的角度出發(fā)來運(yùn)用單詞，從而造成病句。

例如：I against these rules because they are not so good.

剖析：本句是典型的詞性誤用，against 是一個(gè)介詞。需要與be 動(dòng)詞一起構(gòu)成謂語成分。

改為： I am against these rules because they are useless.

6、指代不清

指代不清是指代詞與被指代的人或物關(guān)系不清，或者出現(xiàn)前后代詞不一致的情況。

例如：Alice and my sister are neighbors, and she always invites her to her house.

剖析：在這句話中，讀者無法明確地判斷這兩位姑娘到底是誰邀請(qǐng)誰去家里做客。所以在寫作中，我們應(yīng)該盡量避免容易引起誤解的代詞，將所指對(duì)象加以明確，方便理解。

改為：Alice and my sister are neighbors, and she always invites my sister to her house.

7、措詞問題

造成措辭問題的原因，往往是由于很多中國的學(xué)生習(xí)慣用中式思維造句，然后再在腦子里把中文翻譯成英文。特別是在考場(chǎng)上由于時(shí)間緊迫，學(xué)生經(jīng)常想到一個(gè)詞，拿來就用，完全不考慮措辭的搭配是否合理。另外，很多學(xué)生喜歡在考前背老師給的，或者是網(wǎng)上自己找的模板，這些模板良莠不齊，很容易對(duì)學(xué)生造成誤導(dǎo)。正確的做法應(yīng)該是在平時(shí)養(yǎng)成查英英字典的好習(xí)慣，同時(shí)多積累一些地道的表達(dá)。

例如：Therefore, teenagers are more likely to make a crime in this sophisticated society.

剖析：這句話中“make a crime”就是典型的措辭誤用，“犯罪“的地道表達(dá)應(yīng)該是”commit a crime”。 其次，很多同學(xué)喜歡寫一些看上去很長(zhǎng)，拼寫很復(fù)雜，不明覺厲的詞，例如這句話中的“sophisticated”，以為會(huì)讓考官眼前一亮，但英文中實(shí)際不存在這種搭配，復(fù)雜的社會(huì)用“in this complicated society”比較合適。

改為：Therefore, teenagers are more likely to commit crimes in this complicated society.

8、累贅

言簡(jiǎn)意賅其實(shí)也是一種能力。句子短小精悍，實(shí)際上比為了湊字?jǐn)?shù)而寫出不必要的長(zhǎng)句要有用得多。因此我們的原則是：能用單詞的就不用詞組，能用詞組的就不用從句。

例如： Considering the fact that the problem is very complex，the government needs to take more targeted measures.

剖析：本句的“the fact that the problem is very complex”系同謂語從句，按照上述的原則，我們可以用詞組來替換這個(gè)從句。

改為：Considering the complexity of problem，the government needs to take more targeted measures.

9、不連貫

不連貫主要指的是兩個(gè)句子缺乏邏輯上的聯(lián)系，前文不搭后語，或者連接詞使用的不準(zhǔn)確。這也是考生最常犯的一個(gè)錯(cuò)誤。所以在練習(xí)寫作時(shí)，必須要有意識(shí)地加強(qiáng)句子之間的邏輯。

例如：Home-working enables employees to make a better balance between career and family. Working at home can free people from the sudden changes of weather.

剖析：乍一看，這兩句句子表達(dá)清晰，用詞正確，好像沒有什么錯(cuò)誤，但卻忽略了兩句句子之間的聯(lián)系。兩句話都是描述在家工作的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，我們可以用“what’s more”、”in addition”等詞來表達(dá)一種遞進(jìn)關(guān)系，這樣就使文章的層次更豐富。

改為：Home-working enables employees to make a better balance between career and family. In addition, working at home can free people from the sudden changes of weather.

10、修飾語錯(cuò)位

英語與漢語不同，同一個(gè)修飾語置于句子不同的位置，句子的含義可能引起變化。對(duì)于這一點(diǎn)中國學(xué)生往往沒有引起足夠的重視，因而造成了不必要的誤解。

例如：The refrigerator was sold to us by a salesman with a money-back guarantee.

剖析：本句中究竟是salesman有money-back guarantee，還是冰箱有?雖然也許能根據(jù)句意推斷出是冰箱有退款保證，但是這里的修飾語錯(cuò)位還是給讀者帶來了不小的困擾。

改為：The refrigerator with a money-back guarantee was sold to us by a salesman.

2017.05.06托福獨(dú)立寫作范文(友誼篇)

2017.05.06托福獨(dú)立寫作范文(友誼篇)

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement

It is impossible to be completely honest with your friends all the time.

總是對(duì)你的朋友絕對(duì)誠實(shí)是不可能的。

5月6日這場(chǎng)托?？荚嚨莫?dú)立寫作題既普通又特別。普通之處在于它重復(fù)2011年12月17日的原題。特別之處在于它又是一道關(guān)于友誼的題目。

最近關(guān)于友誼的獨(dú)立寫作題出現(xiàn)得確實(shí)有些頻繁，從4月1日的“朋友犯錯(cuò)是否該繼續(xù)這段友誼”到和15日的“該交聰明的朋友還是幽默的朋友”，再到今天這場(chǎng)“能否對(duì)朋友一直誠實(shí)”，friend 或者 friendship 真有點(diǎn)刷屏的嫌疑。

不過，ETS喜歡刷同類題，早在4月15日這場(chǎng)的解析中我就指出過，當(dāng)時(shí)我的原話如下：

“并不是說翔哥預(yù)測(cè)能力有多強(qiáng)，而是官方出新題成本太大，再加上最近他們玩瘋了各種ABCD卷，舊題出現(xiàn)的頻率確實(shí)呈上漲趨勢(shì)。此外，按以往規(guī)律來看，獨(dú)立寫作同類話題，有集中出沒的現(xiàn)象。所以針對(duì)每場(chǎng)考題去練習(xí)同類舊題，在下一場(chǎng)碰到的機(jī)率還是不小的?！?/p>

另外還有個(gè)刷存在感的詞是誠實(shí) - honesty，這個(gè)詞在今年第一場(chǎng)1月7日托福考試出現(xiàn)，當(dāng)時(shí)問的是 Do you agree or disagree: If you are selecting a leader for a student organization, honesty is the most important to consider in deciding whom to vote for. 你同意不同意：投票選擇學(xué)生組織的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)時(shí)，我們最需要去考慮的是誠實(shí)。

雖然考的話題不一樣，但無疑都在問我們，誠實(shí)到底是不是最重要的。正所謂套路玩多了，甚至一點(diǎn)都沒有，最終也必將是玩“套”自焚。但是很多也說，朋友之間雖說不會(huì)為了一己私利而編天大的謊言，但是可能為了對(duì)方著想，尤其是一些特殊情況，撒點(diǎn)善意的謊言在所難免。

鑒于大部分人會(huì)選擇寫同意此觀點(diǎn)，我就任性一次，選擇不同意。真正的朋友之間是可以沒有任何套路的，不服來辯。

托福寫作范文

Although a vast majority of people agree that how to choose right friends and build healthy relationships with them is especially important, they are split in their opinions over what is the most important consideration in a friendship. Among all the possible considerations, always telling the truth is taken into account by not a few people. Then, is it possible to be always completely honest with your friends? The answer is, as far as I am concerned, surely in the affirmative.

It is true that being completely honest might hurt our friend's feelings. Take a frequently-occurred situation as an example. Alvin's friend Kikyou, who buys a new outfit for a birthday party, asks him, "Does it look good on me?" Alvin, based on the fact, says, "No way! It makes you look ten pounds heavier." Upon hearing his answer, Kikyou may return him with a hostile glare. Indeed, these truthful words, to a large extent, are not pleasing to a friend's ears, though they might be said with the best intentions. Nevertheless, a true friend is willing to tell us the truth, no matter what. And if we get irritated or even indignant, we do not really respect him or her and treat him or her as a true friend. Moreover, a true friend, knowing we might not be so comfortable with negative comments, would certainly choose to answer in a gentle but not brutal way. Alvin would say he is partial to the one Kikyou wore yesterday to show his unfavorable view of that outfit.

Most importantly, friendships, especially long-term ones, are not built in one day. Regular flattery or flat-out lies may help us forge new friendships or even maintain those relationships for a period of time, yet only by being completely honest to those we feel and care will the friendship stand the test of time and stay stable for a sizable chunk of life, or even for our whole life. This is because complete honesty can build up mutual trust between friends. As long as trust keeps a constant presence, misunderstandings or obstacles to any friendship can be avoided and removed if occurring.

In conclusion, I disagree with the statement, and I highly recommend that everyone should have the courage to blurt out any truthful words. Just make sure to respond without jealousy or anger.

2017年6月3日托福寫作真題分析： 看友識(shí)人

托福獨(dú)立寫作題目

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? One can learn a lot about a person from the type of friends this person has.

從一個(gè)人所交朋友的類型，能深入了解這個(gè)人。

寫 作 解 析

據(jù)新航道考生回憶來看，本場(chǎng)考試寫作部分難在 task1-綜合寫作，閱讀材料的篇幅比較長(zhǎng)，比平常的要多出四分之一的內(nèi)容。不過好在閱讀材料仍然在陳述三個(gè)要點(diǎn)的段落，貼心地提供了小標(biāo)題，幫助我們提煉每段重要信息。

task2 獨(dú)立寫作，題目如上所示，考的是2011年11月份的原題，雖然時(shí)隔多年，很多同學(xué)覺得跟新題無異。但是令人開心的是，題目又是一道跟朋友相關(guān)的話題，今年上半年官方看來是跟人際交往杠上了，嗯，沒毛病，ETS爸爸開心就好。

縱觀歷年考題會(huì)發(fā)現(xiàn)，官方以前還考過類似的一道題，問 “從一個(gè)人的穿著打扮，能否了解這個(gè)人的性格特點(diǎn)”。不僅考過了解個(gè)人，其實(shí)還有了解某個(gè)國家。最經(jīng)典的一道題當(dāng)屬你同意不同意參觀博物館是了解一個(gè)國家的最好方式。很多同學(xué)在寫這道題會(huì)從不同意角度去寫，因?yàn)閰⒂^博物館只能了解一個(gè)國家的某些方面，比如過去的歷史，文化等，但是要全面了解這個(gè)國家，最好是去那個(gè)國家旅行，甚至工作一段時(shí)間。當(dāng)然其他方式還有看書看報(bào)看新聞，看視頻等等。該題按這樣的思路展開寫不同意，肯定完全可以，但本場(chǎng)考題，不建議不同意，因?yàn)轭}目語氣沒那么絕對(duì)，只是說通過朋友類型可以了解，并沒有刻意強(qiáng)調(diào)是最好的方式。

同意的話，我們可以談及很多朋友都是因?yàn)橹救は嗤恫抛叩揭黄?，比如某個(gè)人身邊有一群逗比朋友，那說明這個(gè)人也不太可能是非常正兒八經(jīng)的一個(gè)人，即使看起來如此，但私底下肯定有逗比搞笑的一面。再者很多人是因?yàn)槎枷矚g某種音樂或者某一本書才認(rèn)識(shí)，所以也能通過這類朋友了解某個(gè)人喜歡什么音樂，看什么書或者吃什么。

不同意當(dāng)然也可以寫，可以談及有時(shí)候交朋友不一定是有相同性格特點(diǎn)，而很有可能是剛好相反，性格上的互補(bǔ)也會(huì)促使兩個(gè)人走到一塊。比如一個(gè)內(nèi)向的人身邊可能有多個(gè)外向的朋友，這樣這個(gè)人就不會(huì)一直自己寂寞孤單冷。另外每個(gè)人身邊的朋友至少有幾個(gè)，而每個(gè)人也會(huì)展現(xiàn)多種性格特點(diǎn)所以很難從這么多的朋友中判斷他到底是什么樣的人。

2017年5月27日托福獨(dú)立寫作真題分析

托福獨(dú)立寫作題目：

Which one of the following values is the most important to share with a young child (5-10 years old)?

1. being helpful

2. being honest

3. being well organized

跟5到10歲小孩子分享一個(gè)價(jià)值觀，你覺得下面哪個(gè)是最重要的：

1 樂于助人

2誠實(shí)待人

3 組織能力強(qiáng)

又是一道三選一的題目，今年上半年已經(jīng)出現(xiàn)了三道這樣的題目，等等，這個(gè)寫作題目似曾相識(shí)，就在本月13日考過，一! 模! 一! 樣! 是的，我們都沒看錯(cuò)，5月27日這場(chǎng)考的就是兩周前才考過的原題(點(diǎn)這里看原題)。

關(guān)于 ETS 爸爸喜歡出原題，我早就分析過多次，尤其是在今年3月份出現(xiàn)多卷閱讀和聽力之后，舊題重復(fù)的現(xiàn)象明顯增加。而寫作方面的一個(gè)明顯套路是某一個(gè)詞反復(fù)出現(xiàn)在不同的題目中，強(qiáng)行刷臉，或者會(huì)就某一個(gè)話題出不同的變異題。我在5月6日這一場(chǎng)的解析中提到 honest 這個(gè)有刷屏的嫌疑。

另外還有個(gè)刷存在感的詞是誠實(shí) - honesty，這個(gè)詞在今年第一場(chǎng)1月7日托?？荚嚦霈F(xiàn)，當(dāng)時(shí)問的是 Do you agree or disagree: If you are selecting a leader for a student organization, honesty is the most important to consider in deciding whom to vote for. 你同意不同意：投票選擇學(xué)生組織的領(lǐng)導(dǎo)時(shí)，我們最需要去考慮的是誠實(shí)。

而本場(chǎng)考題我在5月13日這一場(chǎng)的解析中也提到它就是一道變異題。

每個(gè)人都是從小屁孩成長(zhǎng)為翩翩君子或者窈窕淑女，不過真要我們?cè)谟齼荷险f出震古爍今的真諦，尤其是考場(chǎng)限時(shí)情況下，還真不是每個(gè)人都能做到的。幸運(yùn)的是，這次5月13日的三選一考題又是一道變異題，所給三個(gè)選項(xiàng)都是之前考過的…

總之，千言萬語的趨勢(shì)分析匯成一句話：趕緊關(guān)注我們北美考試精英匯，分分鐘教你拿下托?？荚?。

這套題，當(dāng)時(shí)的思路當(dāng)然仍然適用。如果選擇分享樂于助人的價(jià)值觀，可以談及教小孩子學(xué)會(huì)與他人相處，收獲更多朋友，慢慢成長(zhǎng)為一個(gè)有社會(huì)責(zé)任感的好青年。選擇分享誠實(shí)待人，可以談及能幫助規(guī)范小孩子的行為，同樣也能幫他們建立良好的人際關(guān)系。選擇分享組織能力，更多地可以從小孩的自律，以及獨(dú)立處理問題的能力這些方面切入探討。

既然 honest 這么喜歡刷臉，那我下面的文章就選擇 being honest，在寫法上采取常規(guī)的主講being honest 的兩個(gè)好處，算是比較容易上手，供大家參考。

6月10日托福寫作解析 - 去考場(chǎng)吃中飯還是考完回家吃晚飯?

全國范圍內(nèi)的部分托?？键c(diǎn)網(wǎng)絡(luò)系統(tǒng)出現(xiàn)問題，導(dǎo)致很多考場(chǎng)的考生未能及時(shí)進(jìn)場(chǎng)考試，被告知在外面等待。

有的考場(chǎng)學(xué)生等了半小時(shí)不到就進(jìn)去了，而有的等了2小時(shí)，更悲催的是個(gè)別考場(chǎng)，那真是永久的等待，等了3個(gè)小時(shí)以上。

不少考生因此萌生了標(biāo)題所問，是繼續(xù)等待，等2個(gè)小時(shí)在考場(chǎng)吃飯，還是等3個(gè)小時(shí)，考完回家吃晚飯。不管實(shí)際是哪種情況，鬼知道這些考生經(jīng)歷了什么。

最最悲傷的是有的考場(chǎng)部分電腦出問題，耽誤考生十多分鐘，所以在這些考生終于回到電腦前做聽力時(shí)，旁邊的人開始說口語了。而當(dāng)旁邊的人開始進(jìn)入寫作部分時(shí)，他們自己又開始 describe the city，簡(jiǎn)直是互相傷害啊。

最最令人哭笑不得的是，說了半天在考場(chǎng)吃飯，最后的寫作部分還真考在哪吃飯的問題。原題如下：

2017年6月10日托福獨(dú)立寫作題目

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Some people like to buy and eat their meals at restaurants frequently, while others like to cook most of the meals at home and rarely go to the restaurant. Which do you prefer? Why?

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有些人喜歡經(jīng)常下館子，其他人卻很少這樣做，而總愿意在家做飯。你喜歡哪種方式，為什么?

寫 作 解 析

這道題目是其實(shí)是 ETS 爸爸在 2006 年以前老托考試所用寫作題庫(包含185個(gè)話題)中一道題，改革以后的新托?？荚嚜?dú)立寫作仍然沿用題庫里的內(nèi)容，但是官方發(fā)現(xiàn)好多鬼崽子直接背范文照搬，于是慢慢削減原題的使用，開始出各種變異題，當(dāng)然也會(huì)出新的獨(dú)立寫作題目。

在家弄飯的好處自然無需多言，吃得更健康，吃得更省錢，最重要的是能有大把的時(shí)間跟家人呆在一起，這種黃金時(shí)間在現(xiàn)代社會(huì)彌足珍貴。比如媽媽弄飯，爸爸打下手，兒子負(fù)責(zé)飯后洗碗。吃飯時(shí)一家人有說有笑，因?yàn)樵谧约杭?，什么都可以聊，什么都可以玩。讓十歲的兒子背個(gè)唐詩三百首，五歲的閨女跳個(gè)六一兒童節(jié)的舞蹈，其樂融融，豈不美哉。

在餐館吃飯更多是為了慶祝某個(gè)重大事件比如生日，升學(xué)等，或者就是三五個(gè)好友一起吃頓飯，嘮嘮嗑。既能增進(jìn)親朋好友間的感情，又是一種娛樂消遣，正所謂獨(dú)樂樂不如眾樂樂。再者不少餐館大廚的手藝還是很贊的，不論是菜式，還是味道，絕對(duì)拉家常菜幾條街。

平心而論，私以為下館子這事還是不要太頻繁，人啊，還是?；丶铱纯?，常回家吃吃飯。

2017年6月25日托福托福獨(dú)立寫作題目范文

寫作題目：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: It is better to work for business owned by someone you don't know than for the business owned by your family.

題目翻譯：給別人工作要比在家族企業(yè)干好

詞伙：

1. elbow their ways 擠

2. Royal roads 捷徑

3. Spare no effort to do sth 不遺余力干某事

4. Increase the productivity 增加生產(chǎn)力

5. Explore potential 開發(fā)潛能

Sample answer

Nowadays, as a great number of graduates finish their universities, they elbow their ways through the crowds in the job market. Although some hold the idea that facing with such a tough competition, it is better for graduates to work for family business to enjoy the royal roads that have paved for them, I believe that working for others plays a vital role to the development of students’ future careers.

First of all, it is working for others that enhances our ability to communicate, a skill critical for career development. In the workplace, people spare no effort to communicate directly with high efficiency and the supervisors give advice to candidates candidly so that employees are able to follow the leaders the commands to increase the productivity afterwards. More often than not, for the sake of the company, the leaders may yell at candidates because they have expressed ideas ambiguously, resulting in the loss of profits. Lectured by the bosses, we are easy to gradually gain the approach to communicate with main points, ignoring the irrelevant parts and delivering the relevant sections, the way that better improve the communicative efficiency in the company.

In addition, by working for others, we are easy to explore our potential. Making profits is the first step of the commercial activity for the company, while hiring the fewest employees to work on the most jobs provides such a shortcut. If we work in the company, we have penchant to carry out more than one jobs, work around clocks, all of which constantly challenge our limits. But it is these challenges that upgrades ourselves rapidly. Being able to survive in this critical moment at the younger age, we are more likely to live in any other harsh condition, like what Darwin in his theory survival of the fittest, thus increasing our chance of survival in the growing ferocious job markets.

According to the reasons that I have mentioned above which are working for other explores our potential and enhancing our ability to communicate, I am able to draw up the conclusion that working for others motivates people, triggers people’s passion and enthusiasm. Therefore I would strongly recommend working for others instead of working in the family business.