托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作的三大提分點(diǎn)

托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作的三大提分點(diǎn)，這就是高分的秘籍,快來(lái)一起學(xué)習(xí)學(xué)習(xí)吧，下面小編就和大家分享，來(lái)欣賞一下吧。

托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作的三大提分點(diǎn)

對(duì)于寫(xiě)作，想必大家或多或少都會(huì)有一些問(wèn)題，今天，上海新航道托福培訓(xùn)小編為大家總結(jié)了托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作的三大提分點(diǎn)，并為大家解答一些問(wèn)題。

1.是不是字?jǐn)?shù)越多，高分越有保證?

是的。因?yàn)橥懈?xiě)作，主要考察考生在多大程度上，能就一個(gè)話題有效展開(kāi)。一般來(lái)說(shuō)，如果寫(xiě)的越多，意味著考生對(duì)某一個(gè)話題的認(rèn)識(shí)越深;也能從側(cè)面反映考生的知識(shí)面很廣、英文詞句儲(chǔ)備很大。

另外，500+的數(shù)字，能夠沖淡你作文中的語(yǔ)言硬傷(拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤、語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤等)。因?yàn)榭脊偻鶗?huì)假定，由于你表達(dá)的東西太多，而來(lái)不及檢查錯(cuò)誤，從而對(duì)你網(wǎng)開(kāi)一面。

比如，很多新航道的線下課學(xué)生，每次批改作業(yè)都是語(yǔ)言錯(cuò)誤不斷(尷尬的中式表達(dá)、頑固的語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤等等)但最終都能拿到28+。如果非要?dú)w納共同點(diǎn)的話，那就是這類學(xué)生，往往在出考場(chǎng)后都會(huì)很興奮地微信我說(shuō)，老師老師，今天考了很熟悉的話題，所以很有的寫(xiě)!

最后的最后，記?。骸白?jǐn)?shù)多、分?jǐn)?shù)高”這一鐵律建立在一個(gè)重要的前提下，那就是：你多出來(lái)的話必須要“扣題”和“言之有物”。字?jǐn)?shù)多的文章表面上是贏在字?jǐn)?shù)，然而實(shí)際起作用的是：海量的有效信息。

2.需不需準(zhǔn)備名人名例?

比如貝多芬、羅斯福、孔子……

在絕大部分情況下，我的答案都是“不!需!要!”

因?yàn)镋TS在OG中已經(jīng)說(shuō)的很清楚了，“exemplification(例證)”的好壞完全取決于，你所舉的例子能夠有效地支持前面的分論點(diǎn)和道理。

所以，只要能夠恰到好處地支持前面的道理，例子本身不分貴賤。比如：父母是否應(yīng)該嚴(yán)格管教孩子?

第一種舉例方式：你可以拿貝多芬說(shuō)事。因?yàn)樨惗喾腋赣H對(duì)他的管教很嚴(yán)?！柏惗喾以谕昃毲贂r(shí)稍有懈怠，便是一頓暴打。父親的教育方式雖然嚴(yán)苛，但也為貝多芬后期作曲事業(yè)的騰飛打下了堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)?！辈贿^(guò)這個(gè)例子，也可以被自己隨便編的例子完美替換。

所以第二個(gè)的例子可以這么編：有一個(gè)人，這個(gè)人可以是你表哥、也可以是你鄰居Jack，都無(wú)所謂。例子的正文可以說(shuō)，“Jack是你們小區(qū)里的鋼琴神童，年紀(jì)雖小，但鋼琴造詣極高。但你知道，Jack之所以能取得今天的成就，就是因?yàn)楦赣H對(duì)他的管教極嚴(yán)。每天督促他學(xué)習(xí)，為他的鋼琴技巧打下了堅(jiān)實(shí)基礎(chǔ)。”雖然后面這個(gè)例子一看就知道是編的，但其實(shí)無(wú)所謂。因?yàn)榭脊僦豢茨愕睦邮欠穹铣ＷR(shí)、以及能否支持前面的觀點(diǎn)。

最后，倒是有一種特例，我會(huì)鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生使用名人名例。當(dāng)這些名例考生已經(jīng)爛熟于心了，比如有的考生剛剛考完GRE，為Issue準(zhǔn)備了好幾個(gè)名人名例。如果他們想把這些例子直接搬上托福考場(chǎng)，只要符合“扣題”的前提，我雙手贊成。

3.需要不要模版?

不需要用“模版”，但需要有“模版意識(shí)”。

先解釋為什么要有“模版意識(shí)”。因?yàn)橐话銇?lái)說(shuō)，模版都會(huì)涵蓋三個(gè)部分：開(kāi)頭、中間三段、結(jié)尾。而每一個(gè)中間段又會(huì)被進(jìn)一步分為：分論點(diǎn)，道理，例子。這些部分，都是得分點(diǎn)，缺一不可。建立“模版意識(shí)”會(huì)保證我們不會(huì)因?yàn)槿笔С煞侄鴣G分。

再說(shuō)為什么不需要用“模版”。其實(shí)托福寫(xiě)作界各路前輩，都已經(jīng)用親身例子來(lái)反復(fù)論證過(guò)，“用模版既不加分也不扣分”。唯一的優(yōu)勢(shì)，可能就是：擴(kuò)充字?jǐn)?shù)，最多50字。所以說(shuō)，這種做法最多是給那個(gè)“無(wú)話可說(shuō)”的你買一個(gè)心安、聊以慰籍罷了。

相反，不如稍微花一兩個(gè)小時(shí)，學(xué)習(xí)怎樣把分論點(diǎn)講簡(jiǎn)單、講豐富的技巧。比如，筆者從美國(guó)研究生院習(xí)得的“橋梁概念” 就特別適用于托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作(包括GRE的Issue)，這套方法論的精髓就是，能把任何一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)拆成8句話。既可以把事情說(shuō)的更清晰縝密，客觀上也起到了擴(kuò)充字?jǐn)?shù)的作用。相較于背模版、使用模版，這是一個(gè)更務(wù)實(shí)、好處更多的選擇。

最后，祝各位考生都能取得理想的成績(jī)!

2020.1.11托福綜合寫(xiě)作參考范文

今天上海新航道托福培訓(xùn)班為大家?guī)?lái)的是2020.1.11托福綜合寫(xiě)作參考范文!

本題是重復(fù)2017年12月16日真題，如何保護(hù)蝙蝠不被風(fēng)力渦輪機(jī)傷害

閱讀：

1，蝙蝠每年遷徙的路線是固定的，所以只要把風(fēng)力渦輪機(jī)建在遠(yuǎn)離遷徙路線的地方即可;2，風(fēng)力渦輪機(jī)只在白天工作，如此一來(lái)，夜間活動(dòng)的蝙蝠便不會(huì)受到影響;3，使用雷達(dá)電波驅(qū)趕蝙蝠。事實(shí)表明，蝙蝠一般不在有雷達(dá)顛簸的地方活動(dòng)。

聽(tīng)力：1， 風(fēng)力渦輪機(jī)的選址比較特殊，需要在山脊才有足夠的風(fēng)發(fā)電，但山脊正好在蝙蝠遷飛的路線上。如果伴奏，可能會(huì)影響渦輪機(jī)的效果;2， 蝙蝠晚上活動(dòng)白天休息，蝙蝠會(huì)選址比較高的建筑結(jié)構(gòu)休息，比如風(fēng)力渦輪機(jī)。如果讓渦輪白天工作，可能對(duì)休息的蝙蝠產(chǎn)生影響;3，蝙蝠之所以遠(yuǎn)離雷達(dá)，是因?yàn)槔走_(dá)顛簸會(huì)破壞它們的生殖系統(tǒng)。如果采用雷達(dá)電波驅(qū)趕，這會(huì)帶來(lái)傷害，從而使數(shù)量更少。

話題分類：生物/技術(shù)類

參考范文：

The reading passage and the lecture debate on the solutions to save bats from being harmed by wind turbine. The reading passage proposes three solutions, which are all contradicted by the following lecture.

The first solution is to construct wind turbine at places not interfering with bats’ migratory patterns. Scientists could study the patterns, and then guide power companies to build turbines not in the paths of the bats' migrations. However, the lecturer finds this impractical because wind turbines have to be built where there is plenty of wind to spin the turbine. But that’s exactly where bats are most likely to migrate as they follow mountain ridges. The wind speed will be too slow to spin the turbines if they are built outside of bats’ migration paths, for example flat plains.

The second solution is to shut down the current wind turbines at night, so that the blades of the wind turbines will not harm the bats flying though the area. But the lecture opposes, contending that bats have to sleep when the night is almost over, often on the wind turbines. When the wind turbines are turned back on during the day the bats will still be harmed.

The last solution, according to the reading, is to use radar to keep bats away from the turbines. It is because bats can detect the waves emitted by radar, and they will stay away from it. Yet the lecture finds this a bad idea as radar waves can harm the bats’ reproductive organs. Once they get in touch with the wave, their reproductive system will be permanently injured and this will further reduce bat’s population.

.

2019年6月15日托福綜合寫(xiě)作解析及參考范文

閱讀：Wildlife Crossings 的可行性

1. 野生動(dòng)物不熟悉，沒(méi)有辦法用

2. 花費(fèi)太大

3. 阻礙生物數(shù)量和繁殖能力，因?yàn)橹挥幸恍∑瑓^(qū)域可以活動(dòng)

聽(tīng)力：反駁

1，剛開(kāi)始的第一年確實(shí)不行不會(huì)用，但是野生動(dòng)物的適應(yīng)能力很強(qiáng)的，所以后面幾年使用會(huì)大幅度增長(zhǎng)。

2，對(duì)于人來(lái)說(shuō)比較危險(xiǎn)，動(dòng)物橫穿馬路造成人們受傷，一年會(huì)有很多起，花費(fèi)的錢更多。

3，roads限制了生物的活動(dòng)區(qū)域，crossing幫助他們客服這個(gè)困難，這樣就可以任意活動(dòng)，從而位置healthy population。

話題分類：動(dòng)物學(xué)

2019年6月15日托福綜合寫(xiě)作解題思路：

閱讀部分仔細(xì)看，很多時(shí)候能夠給我們一些聽(tīng)力內(nèi)容方面的提示。

聽(tīng)力的細(xì)節(jié)一定盡可能的給全。

2019年6月15日托福綜合寫(xiě)作參考范文

Both reading and listening deal with the same topic about the possibility of crossings. However, their perspectives are different. According to the reading, crossing sare not a good way for wildlife animals, while the professor in the listening casts doubt on the writer’s argument.

First, the reading points out animals are unfamiliar with the crossings so that they don’t know how to use it. However, in the lecture, the professor mentions that it won’t work for the first year for sure. For animals, they need more time, like 10 years, but their adaptation is strong. So in the following years, the using of crossings will increase greatly.

In addition, the writer contends that building crossings costs a lot. On the contrary, the professor holds the idea that otherwise it’s actually dangerous for human. He states that thousands of people get damaged and cost millions of dollars to fix that. Building crossings can effectively avoid it. So crossing is not only benefit animals, but also is additional merits for human.

The last point of there ading illustrates that in developed area, the habits of wildlife get damaged and fragmentation is not good for their hunting food and reproduction. In contrast, the professor refuses to accept the writer’s idea by asserting the crossing can in fact, connect different areas, animals pass through anywhere freely and easily. So they can maintain a healthy population with the crossings.

2019年6月15日托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作解析及參考范文

話題分類：工作

2019年6月15日托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作解題思路：

禁止之后會(huì)減少員工不滿意度：

1，非工作時(shí)間的郵件會(huì)很大程度干擾員工休息，進(jìn)而影響效率

2，消磨員工的積極性和工作熱情

3，員工會(huì)有被尊重和被理解的感受

不會(huì)減少員工的不滿意程度：

1，對(duì)工作內(nèi)容本身，比如創(chuàng)新性，挑戰(zhàn)性，喜愛(ài)程度等不滿意，無(wú)法被抵消

2，工作環(huán)境(辦公環(huán)境和人際關(guān)系)是更影響滿意程度的部分

3，如果周末接收郵件需要工作能夠得到足夠的認(rèn)可或者獎(jiǎng)勵(lì)，也是可以接受的。

2019年6月15日托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作參考范文：

For corporations, it’s fairly reasonable to provide a working environment that all workers have fewer complaints about. Some of them have planed prohibiting sending emails to the employees at weekends, thought it will alleviate their discontent towards their workplace. But some strong believers are inclined to the fact that even receiving no tasks in their leisure time, employees will not easily change their attitude to the company. Accordingly, I with no hesitation, advocate that declining disturbance toworkers’ personal life such as their holidays from company can greatly improve their satisfactory of the firm.

For starters, everyone needs to have a rest while constant assignments will finally eliminate their passion to work. Specifically, most people, indeed, enjoy doing their jobs with high level of satisfaction, but this only happens when they are not tired of current jobs and have regular breaks during busy weekdays. If company fail to distinguish weekends from weekdays, employees will possibly develop boredom after long-time working. For instance, my best friend who just enters the workplace, at first, she had sufficient enthusiasm and energy towards her job. However, she seldom had weekends due to constant extra work assigned via emails, since her boss always said that brilliant workers should contribute more to the whole company. At last, she cannot bear it but resigned without any reluctance to this job. Thus, it is extremely essential for the employers to provide enough personal space without improper emails during the weekends.

On the other hand, for bidding emails related to work at the weekends greatly facilitate better working achievements of the employees, which can definitely enhance their sense of content. Considering the fierce competition in present society, overwhelming burdens, tasks and numerous problems at work always exhaust people. In this case, offering undisturbed and relaxing holidays to them can let them better recover from the tiredness and become more energetic for the following tasks hence leading to higher possibilities of successful outcomes. With enjoyable working experience and strong sense of achievement, it is hardly for workers to feel bad or unsatisfactory towards their companies. As a result, I believe that companies had better avoid any working emails at the weekends in order to allow their workers to have a better rest.

Given all reasons and examples discussed above, I can safely come to the conclusion that workers will become more satisfied towards the company when they have no interference from the working emails at the weekends.

2019年6月16日托福獨(dú)立寫(xiě)作解析及參考范文

If you go travelling to a city for the first time, but you only have a limited amount of time, which place you will choose?

1. touring the historic sites

2. going shopping on some markets

3. going to the restaurants or cafe

話題分類：生活

解題思路：選1

主體段1：historic sites可以幫助了解當(dāng)?shù)匚幕?/p>

主體段2：historic sites包含markets和food stands

參考范文：

As I plan my ideal itinerary to a completely strange city for the first time, the desirable destination within a limited amount of time must be the historic sites instead of various markets for shopping or places for meals and drink.

To begin with, heading for historic attractions prompts tourists to get acclimated to the local customs and traditions rather quickly. To be specific, a visit to a historic site is regarded as a valuable chance to be exposed to fabulous and time-honored buildings, each with specific history attached to it. In other words, such visits expanding individual outlooks on what may be included in school turn out to be a great approach to re-enforce lessons. Many historical places also enable visitors to attain knowledge excluded in textbooks. Moreover, the multi-linguistic services provided by staff members in such attractions remove the language barriers if the destination is an overseas city, coupled with instant response to tourist’ queries about the destination and its people. Walking along the ancient streets with a high concentration of old buildings dating back to centuries ago, tourists are allowed to have a convenient and comfortable visit since hotels and cafes are just a few blocks away.

Another principal reason to support the visit to historic sites is that some of them commonly comprise diverse markets nearby for shopping and meals. Hood River is a typical example of a city integrating historic sites with the shopping district. Historic buildings line the scenic streets of the urban downtown with a bustling shopping district featuring boutiques, designer shops, art galleries and restaurants. Actually, commercial historic districts are abundant in European cities.

To conclude, historic sites rather than shopping markets or restaurants are recommendatory for people who visit a city for the first time but with a limited deal of time.