GRE作文得分點(diǎn)主要在哪兒
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GRE作文得分點(diǎn)主要在哪兒
1. 邏輯混亂。
2.過于主觀。
3.中式思維/表達(dá)。
4.過分注重用詞。
具體分析：
一、邏輯問題：
大體上來說，同學(xué)們的邏輯問題是最多的。邏輯問題有三種，通篇邏輯，段落之間，段落之中。
其實(shí)這可能和我們高中初中的英語教育有關(guān)系，大家都很喜歡一條一條擺原因。Firstly, secondly...然后后面至于這個(gè)ly后面是什么就不管了，一頓胡扯。也不管這段落與段落之間的銜接是否自然，反正都有什么ly給打頭陣。
事實(shí)上，中西方的思維總是存在差異，很多時(shí)候看管老師們都不懂考生在說什么。考官很困惑，這個(gè)例子和這個(gè)有關(guān)系嗎?為什么前面在說A，后面突然B了?
二、整體觀念：
和結(jié)論什么關(guān)系?要記住一點(diǎn)，GRE作文文章是一個(gè)整體，你的開篇結(jié)尾和中部?jī)?nèi)容都是應(yīng)該有關(guān)聯(lián)的。也就是說，在開頭提到的，文中應(yīng)該有展開，同時(shí)在結(jié)尾有總結(jié)。中文里不也要求行文流暢么，這至少得要求邏輯是通順的。
三、能力要求：
很多同學(xué)都很喜歡寫中立觀點(diǎn)“A不錯(cuò)，但不夠好”，這雖然看起來很客觀，但實(shí)際上這種GRE作文對(duì)邏輯的要求非常高，要怎樣去組織語言，組織相應(yīng)的論據(jù)論點(diǎn)，非?？简?yàn)人。
有同學(xué)想說A事件要瑕疵互見，但是寫著寫著就亂七八糟，東一塊西一塊，不知道在講點(diǎn)什么了。更有厲害的索性冗長(zhǎng)的2000來詞，講了個(gè)空話。所以建議剛上手的同學(xué)，還是選擇一邊倒，站定腳跟不放松。即便是真的要寫中立觀點(diǎn)，實(shí)際上也都在A和B之間有所偏好。
四、內(nèi)容空洞：
此外，現(xiàn)在很多人會(huì)要求練writing的時(shí)候先寫提綱。于是同學(xué)們們就只寫一個(gè)觀點(diǎn)，然后后面的例子亂用，或者根本沒有弄清楚什么是例子。事實(shí)上，這種展開，可以是實(shí)例，也可以是虛擬的假設(shè)。實(shí)例中往往分自己的經(jīng)驗(yàn)和他人的經(jīng)驗(yàn)。那么怎樣的例子有說服力呢?
一般來說是：名人名事(知名度大)> 眾人眾事(樣本大)>自己經(jīng)歷(體會(huì)深)>他人經(jīng)歷。假設(shè)往往不夠有說服力，因?yàn)楹茈y涉及到每一個(gè)變量。但是假設(shè)在有的時(shí)候可以行得通，就是在很難說清楚步驟和因果關(guān)系的時(shí)候，用一個(gè)假設(shè)場(chǎng)景來推導(dǎo)會(huì)讓文章變得淺顯易懂。
所以建議，在剛開始上手寫GRE作文的時(shí)候，先不要給自己30分鐘的壓力，先列出提綱(10分鐘)，再用30分鐘去寫，看能寫多少。
五、選材準(zhǔn)確：
記住你的舉例一定要死死扣住你的GRE作文觀點(diǎn)，不要是和觀點(diǎn)打擦邊球的。比如我改過之前一個(gè)小朋友的文章，她的大觀點(diǎn)是電腦對(duì)學(xué)生來說是有益的，小觀點(diǎn)是，可以查到很多資料，然后例子是可以用google查到很多資料，很快捷。
ok，乍一看這個(gè)沒有問題。但是實(shí)際上問題大了，用goole查到很多資料，是因?yàn)殡娔X還是internet?這很容易就偏題了，變成internet 對(duì)學(xué)生來說是有益的。例子一定要從論點(diǎn)出發(fā)，再回到論點(diǎn)。不要將你的論點(diǎn)發(fā)散，后果很可能就是越寫越跑題。所以每次寫好一篇文章，都看看，論據(jù)里的key words是不是和論點(diǎn)里的key words 一樣，論點(diǎn)里的key words又是不是和題目里的key words一樣。你的key words 可以比大題里的key words更加narrow，但是千萬不要更加廣泛。
邏輯錯(cuò)誤是GRE作文段落中邏輯比較容易錯(cuò)的。一般是對(duì)接續(xù)詞的運(yùn)用。如However, thus, therefore，他們決定了上下文之間的關(guān)系，但是很多讀起來就很奇怪，兩者完全不是轉(zhuǎn)折的關(guān)系，用了however，就會(huì)讓人覺得有些無厘頭?；蛘呔褪巧舷挛闹g完全沒有邏輯聯(lián)系，就是兩個(gè)單句湊在了一起。還是這句話，一篇文章和流水似的，不能斷。中間斷了那就不叫好文章了。即使前一句與有一句沒有接續(xù)詞，它們?cè)谶壿嬌弦彩且艹薪拥摹Ｏ胍サ腉RE寫作滿分，則一定要在邏輯上完美無缺。
GRE issue寫作優(yōu)秀實(shí)例：多媒體教育
題目：
Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
盡管諸如電視、電腦和互聯(lián)網(wǎng)這樣的發(fā)明似乎給學(xué)校教育提供了進(jìn)步的手段，但是所有這些技術(shù)往往也是在偏離真正的學(xué)習(xí)。
正文：
Nowadays there is a growing concern about the role that innovations have played in the field of learning. While most people think that innovations benefit learning process in various ways, different opinions arise that these technology advancements actually distract students from real learning. On balance, according to my personal observation,whether innovations can be beneficial or detrimental to real learning depends on the students and the teachers, not on these innovations themselves.
To begin with, technological innovations do help teaching and learning in various ways.With the aid of these technologies, the process of teaching and learning can be shorter and easier than before. For instance, if a student want certain published papers of an academic discipline, he/she may look through considerable catalogs to find the ones he/she needs. However, with the help of Internet innovation, at present most of these papers are published online. Consequently, to find certain paper the procedure is much easier and shorter, the students just type the key words and other information of the paper, and then the system will search the database, and the papers are there waiting for them. As this new approach can save a lot of time for the students, he/she could have more time reading the papers and absorbing the knowledge rather than checking and looking for the papers that could be a waste of his/her time. This example aptly illustrates how technology advancement benefited the students and their learning process.
Secondly, while innovations can help learning in various ways, it is more important that the central role of the pursuit for knowledge and wisdoms are maintained. What real matters is not the approach but the purpose of learning. In India, where modern technologies are less applied to the learning process than in the US and other developed countries, still a lot of distinguished students achieved their academic goal with their hard work and desires to knowledge. In the US, where the software engineering students are given the most advanced facilities and apparatus for their learning and research, however, it is wildly accepted that they are far less outstanding compared to the Indian students of software, who may share computers in groups. From this comparison we can see that the real and core push of learning is the desire for knowledge, not the help of innovations.
In addition, if not guided properly, the technology advancement might inhibit learning.In other words, innovation can distract the students from real learning than helping them. It is obvious that a computer can help students of science to calculate mathematical equations but can also be used for recreation such as net surfing or computer games. It is highly possible that these students can spend more time and energy on recreations rather than learning when using a computer. Thus, learning is inhibited. Under this circumstance, guidance and restrictions are needed to ensure the right use of innovations for learning, or the consequence may be on the contrary to the students and teachers' desire.
To conclude, technological innovations are beneficial to learning in many ways, but when using these technologies, one should not forget the real purpose of learning and remember not to be distracted for other usages of these innovations that are irrelevant or detrimental to learning. On balance, innovation here serves as a double-edges sword, and its right use is dependent on the students and the teachers.
GRE issue寫作優(yōu)秀實(shí)例：忠誠(chéng)
題目：
Most people are taught that loyalty is a virtue. But loyalty-whether to one's friends, to one's school or place of employment, or to any institution-is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force.
大多數(shù)人被告知忠誠(chéng)是一種美德。但是無論是對(duì)朋友、對(duì)學(xué)校、對(duì)單位還是對(duì)任何機(jī)構(gòu)，忠誠(chéng)時(shí)常都是弊大于利的。
正文：
I disagree with the author for he has confused the faithfulness with the misguided or overextended loyalty. In fact, loyalty does be a cherished virtue that should be given enough emphasis.
Loyalty, a kind of lasting persistence and its precondition is that the subject of fidelity is worthy of such strong emotion. In each society, loyalty is a indispensable and vital part of the system of morality. No matter in schools, at home or at work, first midst and last, people accept a similar education that as an individual, he or she should first have a sense of ligeance, that is work for the whole. Of course, the subjects of loyalty are various including scientific theory, friends, family, schools, places of employment and the nation. A vivid example can lend support to the statement is the heroical astronomer - Bronow, who advanced Copernicus' theory that the earth and other planets revolve around the sun, enraged the Roma church that held the Ptolemaic system of astronomy and was burnt to death just because he refused to give up his scientific theory. It is the lasting loyalty toward truth that lead Bronow to sacrifice himself. And people all respect such duteous spirit. However, without loyalty, the morality of a society will deteriorate into apathy desert and everyone just lives for him /herself, that is to say, no one is willing to pay loyalty to the whole, then finally the human civilization will fall apart.
However, on the other hand, the fidelity should not be confused with misguided or overextended loyalty and the latter is all too often a destructive rather than a positive force. People all hold that mutual loyalty between friends is the basis of lasting friendship. But people should also realize that true loyalty and authentic responsibility for a friend are not only always believing him or her unconditionally but also persuading, helping and even impeaching him or her when him or her has committed serious mistakes or even crimes. Of course, when facing up to such painful dilemma, each one will hesitate because he or she is afraid of being censured to betray his or her friend and some one may choose to keep slient in order to insist of the so-called loyalty.
In fact, such behavior may prevent his or her friend from taking right actions. The same to a school, a family, a company even the nation, when the subject that people once string along with no longer deserves loyalty, people should resolutely choose to be loyal to the truth, the justice and the humanity. That calls for people are always alert to what they think right and what they think wrong, via doing so, people can change their mind for right choice on time.
To sum up, people should insist on true loyalty, and always avoid being the victim of the misguided or overextended loyalty. In the world, there is nothing that can be always absolutely right or wrong and changing happens all the time. So people should always hold deep insight to discern what deserves their loyalty and what does not.
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