雅思寫作文章誤區(qū)
寫了這么久的雅思作文，技巧和方法都到位了，寫作分數(shù)為什么總是提不上去?今天為大家總結了那些年我們掉進的雅思寫作的坑。下面小編就和大家分享雅思寫作文章避開這幾個誤區(qū)，來欣賞一下吧。
雅思寫作文章避開這幾個誤區(qū)
一、避免空洞的單詞和詞組
1.一些空洞的單詞或詞組根本不能為句子帶來任何相關的或重要的信息，完全可以被刪掉。
比如：When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。
這句話當中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都顯得多余。完全可以去掉。改為：
Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。
2.有些空洞和繁瑣的表達方式可以進行替換
例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time。
“due to the fact that”就是一個很典型的繁瑣的表達方式的例子，可以替換，簡化為下面的表達方式：
Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now。
二、避免重復
1. 盡量避免重復使用同樣的詞匯?；蛘哂械臅r候雖然詞匯沒有重復，但意思卻有重復。這時候可以做一些簡化的工作。
例如下面這個例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。
large對一個farm來說就是size方面的large，所以in size可以去掉，改為：
The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。
更簡潔的表達方式為：
My grandfather grew up on a large farm。
2.有時一個詞組可以用一個更簡單的單詞來替換
例如：My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。
這里的over and over again就可以改為repeatedly，顯得更為簡潔：
My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm。
三、選擇最恰當?shù)恼Z法結構
選擇合適的語法結構可以使句子意思的表達更為精確和簡練。雖然語法的多樣性也很重要，但選擇最恰當?shù)恼Z法結構仍然是更為重要的考慮因素。以下原則是在考慮選擇何種語法結構時可以參考的原則：
1.一個句子的主語和謂語動詞 應該能夠反映句子中的最重要的意思
例如：The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm。
從意思上來分析，上面這句話需要表達的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”，而在表達這個概念時，原句用的主語是situation，謂語動詞是was，不能強調需要表達的重點概念，可以改為下面這句話：
My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm。
2. 避免頻繁使用“there be”結構
例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather。
可以改為：
My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day。
更簡潔的句式為：
My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。
3. 把從句改為短語或單詞
例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote。
簡潔的表達方式為：
The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university。
4. 僅在需要強調賓語而不是主語的時候，才使用被動語態(tài)
例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family。
本句不夠簡潔的原因是本句的重心應該是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”，而使用了被動語態(tài)後，彷佛重心變成了cows和hay。下面的表達方式是主動語態(tài)，相對來說更簡潔一些：
In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay。
5. 用更為精確的一個動詞 來代替動詞短語
例如：My grandfather didn't have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends。
Stand around doing nothing其實可以用一個動詞來表達，即loiter：
My grandfather didn't have time to loiter with his school friends。
6. 有時兩句話的信息經(jīng)過組合，完全可以用一句話來簡練地表達
例如：Profits from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree。
兩句話的信息可以合并為下面這句更為簡潔的句子：
Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses, let alone pay for a university degree。
雅思寫作Task2社會類考官范文
Traffic and housing problems in major cities could be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the countryside.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Model Answer:
These days with increasing urban populations, there are major problems with congestion and not only the price, but also availability of accommodation in large cities of the world. It seems that one possible solution could be to relocate large companies and factories as well as their respective employees out of these urban areas and into more rural ones. In my opinion, I strongly agree that this would have a desired effect in making cities more livable.
To begin with, the traffic problem in cities doesn’t only exist from commuting employees, but also the general public travelling around the city. While this may be a fact, if the number of worker’s vehicles is reduced on city streets, a large percentage of traffic will obviously decline in rush hours. For example, peak hour traffic is undoubtedly made up largely of staff from companies going to and from home.
Secondly, in regards to housing problems, populations will always continue to grow in cities and therefore inadvertently decrease the number of cheap and available apartments. This is certainly obvious, however, a large proportion of these apartments are occupied by employees from large firms and their families. If this workforce is relocated to housing estates in the country, city apartment blocks will fall in price and certainly increase in availability.
In conclusion, by relocating workers to rural areas to work and reside, heavy traffic conditions and lack of adequate accommodation in city centres will obviously change for the better. As far as I’m concerned, I agree that the government should enforce such a law in order to increase our standard of living in our hectic city life.
雅思寫作Task2社會類考官范文
Families who do not send their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education.
Model Answer 1: (Agree)
Families who do not send their children to government-financed school should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education.
When families send their children to non-public (that is, parochial and private) schools, they must pay tuition and other school expenses. Spending additional money to pay taxes creates an even greater financial hardship for these families. They must make sacrifices, trying to have enough money to pay for school in addition to other bills. For example, my friend Amalia is a single mother with an eight-year-old son, Andrew. Because they survive solely on her income, money is tight. Amalia works at least 10 hours of overtime each week to cover Andrew's school expenses. This gives Amalia and Andrew less time to spend together, and she is always so tired that she is impatient with him when they do have family time. Clearly, this extra expense is an unfair burden for hard-working parents like Amalia.
While some people may consider parochial or private school to be a luxury, for many families it is essential because their community's public schools fail to meet their children's needs. Unfortunately, due to shrinking budgets, many schools lack well-qualified, experienced educators. Children may be taught by someone who is not a certified teacher or who knows little about the subject matter. Some problems are even more serious. For example, the public high school in my old neighborhood/neighbourhood had serious safety problems, due to students bringing guns, drugs, and alcohol to school. After a gang-related shooting occurred at the high school, my parents felt that they had no choice but to enroll me in a parochial school that was known for being very safe.
Unfortunately, even when families prefer public schools, sometimes they can't send their children to one. These families are burdened not only for paying expenses at another school, but also by being forced to pay taxes to support a public school that they do not use.
Model Answer 2: (Disagree)
Families who do not send their children to public school should be required to pay taxes that support public education.
Every child in my country is required to attend school and every child is welcome to enroll at his/her local public school. Some families choose to send their children to other schools, and it is their prerogative to do so. However, the public schools are used by the majority of our children and must remain open for everyone. For example, my uncle sent his two children to a private academy for primary school. Then he lost a huge amount of money through some poor investments and he could no longer afford the private school's tuition. The children easily transferred to their local public school and liked it even more than their academy. The public schools supported their family when they had no money to educate their children.
Because the public schools educate so many citizens, everyone in my country-whether a parent or not-should pay taxes to support our educational system. We all benefit from the education that students receive in public school. Our future doctors, fire fighters, and teacherspeople whom we rely on everyday-are educated in local public schools. When a person is in trouble, it's reassuring to know that those who will help you-such as fire fighters-know what they're doing because they received good training in school and later. Providing an excellent education in the public school system is vital to the strength of our community and our country.
Our government must offer the best education available, but it can only do so with the financial assistance of all its citizens. Therefore, everyone-including families who do not send their children to public school-should support public education by paying taxes.
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