雅思小作文圖表題寫作提分之寫作結構

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雅思小作文圖表題寫作提分之寫作結構

雅思寫作評分標準——結構

雅思寫作評分標準中7+的要點在于:清晰的概述;符合邏輯的分段;行文流暢;詞匯靈活;句法多變。不難看出,這些對數(shù)據(jù)的分析能力有很高的要求,正如每一道小作文題目中對寫作要求都有如下表述:

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

上述寫作要求中提及的概述、抓特征和對比正是我們寫作和提分的方向,而就具體的方法而言,在文章結構上突破是一條捷徑。

雅思小作文主體部分(main body)的結構:

分兩段——且只分兩段;

雅思小作文數(shù)據(jù)類圖表考查的圖表類型有五種,分別是線圖、餅圖、柱圖、表格和復合型圖表(上述四種圖表的組合)。在寫作上,圖表的類型并不會對數(shù)據(jù)表達的方法產(chǎn)生實質(zhì)的影響,決定文章主題以及表述方法的是數(shù)據(jù)本身。一般而言,雅思小作文數(shù)據(jù)類圖表僅分兩類:靜態(tài)圖(圖表中沒有時間或者只有一個時間)和動態(tài)圖(圖表中有連續(xù)的兩個或以上的時間概念);我們需要處理的數(shù)據(jù)僅有兩類主題:大小關系(靜態(tài)圖)和變化趨勢(動態(tài)圖),由此我們需要使用的也只有兩套語言:表達比例和大小關系的,和表達變化趨勢的各自一套表達方法,詞匯數(shù)量很有限,掌握的難度遠遠低于大作文基本詞匯。

復合型圖表通常是兩個不同類型的圖表,表述的也是不同的內(nèi)容,所以分段上可以自然分段;對于極少數(shù)超過兩張的圖表,通常單個圖表都極其簡單,所以也可以歸類成兩個段落去呈現(xiàn)數(shù)據(jù)。

對于其他的四種圖表形態(tài)則需要根據(jù)圖表主題靈活分段,對于單個圖表的題型,原則是按照圖表主題、數(shù)據(jù)的特征及主次關系分段,要點是把數(shù)據(jù)分成主次分明的兩個段落。以下舉例說明:雅思小作文例

此題反映了1999年澳大利亞各種家庭類型中處于貧困的比例,圖表中有 “all household” 這樣的綜合信息,建議直接拎出來寫在開頭段的圖表介紹(introduction)之后,類似的信息比如 “total, average”等也可以用這種方法處理。

對剩下來的6組數(shù)據(jù)的處理,也就是文章正文的寫作思路是先把數(shù)據(jù)包切割成兩部分;

1)抓取數(shù)據(jù)中最明顯的特征。六種不同類別的家庭中,單親(sole parent,21%)和單身沒有子女(single no children,19%)的貧困比例最高,另外有子女的夫婦(couple with children,12%)也高于平均數(shù),而其他類型遠低于平均數(shù)。

2)分兩段。雖然可以以平均數(shù)11%為標準把數(shù)據(jù)分成兩類,其邏輯也很清楚,但是,為了更利于凸顯特征,同時也更利于概括,把數(shù)據(jù)最大的兩類單身家庭拎出來單獨成段更合理。

3)確定概述的表述方法,原則是說事實,簡單、直接。把單身家庭(21%和19%)作為正文第一段,概述非常好處理:

Single people, with or without children, were more likely to be poor.

如果帶著有子女的夫婦一起說,就顯得累贅,況且12%的比例更單身的數(shù)據(jù)相比明顯偏低,所以將其并入另一段。這樣的處理是的另一段的概述也比較簡單,即:

By contrast, couples and aged people were better off.

這種分段的方法,通過對數(shù)據(jù)的比較找出最明顯的特征,然后按照特征分段,是對寫作要求(即概括、抓特征以及對比)最直接的回應,同時通過相應的段落和句法上的配合,能夠更加有效地回應寫作任務,達到高分的目的。

這里的例子用的是靜態(tài)圖,但是相同的思路同樣適用于動態(tài)圖的描述,區(qū)別只是把趨勢相同的并在一起寫,趨勢不同的分開寫,然后可以按照絕對值的大小確定主次和先后??脊俚姆段闹袑χ鞔蔚膮^(qū)分和數(shù)據(jù)的取舍都是非常值得借鑒的。

如果是同一類型的多個圖表共同出現(xiàn)的題目,比如較為常見的多餅,多柱的題型,分段的原則是一樣的,也就是按照數(shù)據(jù)的主題和特征去分。如果是靜態(tài)圖,一般可以自然分段,因為通常情況下各個圖表的內(nèi)容不同,如C6T4和C10T3;如果是動態(tài)圖,建議不要按照不同的時間去分段,如C7T4和C9T3,因為動態(tài)圖的主題是變化和趨勢,如果分段上把時間斷開,那么在描述上會不利于呈現(xiàn)總的趨勢和變化,而且在正文第一段描寫第一個時間段時,文章的表述完全是靜態(tài)的,只能描述在某一時間某個些事物的大小,這樣把描寫變化趨勢的壓力全部留給下文,這樣對于語言的、篇幅的壓力就會增加,文章的流暢度和清晰度都會受到影響。所以,對于動態(tài)的多個圖表,建議按照項目分段,保留完整的時間階段以更充分地反映數(shù)據(jù)的主題。

雅思小作文段落的結構:先總后分

有了合理的分段,通篇文章就有了堅實的骨架,而先總后分的段落結構可以把段落的功能充分發(fā)揮出來。正文的兩個段落均通過首句(概括句,即主題句)進行引導,然后通過支持句(以數(shù)據(jù)為證據(jù)的對事實的詳細說明)進行拓展,這樣文章更容易達到連貫、緊湊和流暢。

由于小作文篇幅的限制,一個主題段的段落三、四句話比較合理,這里面去掉首句的概述,只有兩三句話的機會對首句進行拓展,而這兩三句支持句的寫作,需要有意識地把對概述、抓特征和對比的寫作要求的回應推到極致。以上圖為例:

1)主體段落的首句一定是概述 。如上圖,第一段首句概述——單身更容易貧困(Single people, with or without children were more likely to be poor.)之后,需要提供具體的事實作為證據(jù),所以接下來的拓展順理成章,銜接手段也容易選擇。如:In specific, 證據(jù)一:單親家庭貧困比例最高,超過五分之一,達到21%;In addition, 證據(jù)二:單身無子女的貧困率次之,但也遠高于平均水平,接近五分之一,達到19%。

2)主體段第二段通常需要處理一系列次重要數(shù)據(jù),所以配合該段首句展開、分清主次、歸納取舍是構思和寫作的關鍵。在概述 - 夫婦和老人的情況好得多(Couples and aged people were better off.)之后,需要處理四組數(shù)據(jù),即夫婦有小孩12%;夫婦無孩7%;老年夫婦4%;老年單身6%。由于12%明顯大于其它數(shù)據(jù),所以要先寫,然后呈現(xiàn)7%,而老年人4%和6%的數(shù)據(jù)最小,這是數(shù)據(jù)特征,為了體現(xiàn)這一特征,一定要把兩類老年家庭一起寫,可以取平均值加以表述。這樣,由于首句的引導,整段在銜接手段的選擇、敘述語氣的調(diào)整以及數(shù)據(jù)的取舍上就都有了方向。為了配合說“情況好得多”, 在描述12%和7%時就可以恰當?shù)谜{(diào)整一下語氣,如即便有孩夫婦的貧困率略高于平均數(shù) 達到12%,但是無孩的遠低于平均水平,僅7%;然后再提及老年人數(shù)據(jù)時可以理直氣壯得說,老年人極少貧困,貧困率僅約5%。這樣的文章主次分明,且緊湊,同時相應的銜接手段可以使文章更連貫、更流暢。

雅思小作文示例2:

1)按照大小的對比關系來考量,本圖數(shù)據(jù)的特征是三類開銷中第一列 (Food/Drink/Tobacco) 的比例最大,概述也非常簡單直白:

Customer in the given five countries spent the most on food, drink and tobacco.

所以將其拎出來作為主體段第一段的首句很合適。之后,有5個百分比需要作為證據(jù)呈現(xiàn)在支持句里。原則是,絕不寫流水賬。通過觀察數(shù)據(jù),我們發(fā)現(xiàn)土耳其和愛爾蘭的數(shù)據(jù)遠大于其它三個國家,那么這兩個國家的數(shù)據(jù)就需要一起呈現(xiàn),而其它三個國家數(shù)據(jù)相似,也可以歸為一類一起呈現(xiàn),這樣可以更充分地回應任務。而為了配合主題句中“spent the most” 的表述,我們不妨把敘述的方法調(diào)整一下:

Specifically, it cost Turkish and Irish nearly one third of their income, which accounted for 32.14% and 28.91%, respectively.

其它三個國家雖然數(shù)據(jù)要小得多,但是為了保持與段落主題的一致,我們可以把語氣調(diào)整成為:

Even in the rest three countries, namely Spain, Italy and Sweden, the proportions of expenditure on this category were close to one fifth, which represented 18.80%, 16.36% and 15.77%, respectively.

注意在這一段,五個國家地數(shù)據(jù)我是完整呈現(xiàn)的,原因很簡單,它們最大,所以最重要。

2) 正文的第二段,我們需要處理十個百分比,決不要去羅列它們,否則的話是對寫作任務的藐視。我們先確定概述:

By contrast, consumers in five countries allocated much less of their spending on the other two categories, which were clothing and footwear, and leisure and education.

我們這一段的主題是“much less”, 所以數(shù)據(jù)從簡,在第二列里意大利的開銷最大,可以提一下,但是要注意語氣,不妨將其表達為,即便是在開銷最大的意大利,其百分比也不足十分之一(9%),而在剩下的四個國家,這項的開銷都小于十二分之一,或者用7%也行,總之要突出“小”:

With regard to the former one (clothing and footwear), it only took no more than one tenth of daily expenditure (9%) in Italy which ranked the first in all five, while the rest four only spent less than one out of a dozen (7%).

接下來說leisure and education 的時候,給一個約數(shù)即可——都不足5%,千萬不要在糾纏在誰最大誰最小的套路里,因為不論誰大誰小都不重要了。

總之,先總后分的結構,在保證呈現(xiàn)清晰概述的同時,通過主題句對段落的引導,達到結構緊湊,主次分明,行文流暢的效果,是非常有效的、有明確得分目的應試文章的寫作方法。

雅思小作文句子的結構:銜接手段+事實+數(shù)據(jù)

雅思數(shù)據(jù)類圖表的寫作中的句子大體分為兩種:概括句和支持句。概括句越簡單直白越好,如果你提取的特征足夠明顯,那你的概括句應該是非常簡單的句子。而為了更充分地回應概括、抓特征以及對比的寫作任務,同時迎合流暢度以及語法的評分標準,對支持句的處理就需要以實用和效率為原則。

1)好的支持句一定包含著恰當?shù)你暯邮侄?。銜接手段可以是銜接詞,也可以是靈活而準確的指代。為了充分發(fā)揮支持的功能,支持句必須緊扣主題句,提供準確的事實和數(shù)據(jù),同時在語氣上與主題句相匹配。雖然母語的使用過程中,銜接手段是自然流露的,這也正是雅思寫作9分關于連貫及銜接的評分標準,然而鑒于6分- 8分評分細則中對于銜接手段的強調(diào)不僅表現(xiàn)在質(zhì)量上,而且表現(xiàn)在數(shù)量上,所以在訓練小作文的過程中,刻意地增加銜接手段并無不妥,即使有時可能會不自然,但是總好過因為銜接手段不足而在這一項跌至5分。所以建議在每一句句子落筆之前,要想好銜接的手段尤其是一些能夠表達清晰的對比關系的銜接詞,如similarly, by contrast, conversely, to a lesser / greater extent等等。

2)數(shù)據(jù)直接反映出來的事實才是描寫的重點,所以也應該是支持句的關鍵信息。雅思小作文數(shù)據(jù)類圖表寫作的最大誤區(qū)是僅滿足于,或者說專注于對數(shù)據(jù)本身的描寫,而忽略了這一類文章最基本的功能 - 幫助讀者理解圖表。例如在描寫某個體現(xiàn)持續(xù)上升的數(shù)據(jù) (不論是以表格、線、餅或者柱的形式出現(xiàn) )的時候,如果僅僅表達為某某數(shù)字從幾幾年的多少持續(xù)上升到了幾幾年的多少,或者這條線呈上升的趨勢或者這個比例是持續(xù)變大的,對于讀者理解圖表幾乎沒有幫助,所以意義不大。但是一旦與事實結合,閱讀效果就大不一樣了。比如:

Chicken has gained increasing popularity, with its weekly consumption surged from below 150 grams in 1979 to around 220 grams in 2004, compared to the general decline of other types of meat in the given period.

再比如:

The significance of hydro power as one of the main sources of electricity in 1980 remained unchallenged, as indicated by the stable proportion of contribution at around one quarter in both years, regardless of the fact that its units of production nearly doubled in the given period.

數(shù)據(jù)被賦予證據(jù)的功能,用于支持對數(shù)據(jù)所體現(xiàn)出來的事實的概括和分析,這樣的作文不流于機械,才有意義, 同時對雅思寫作任務的回應也更充分。

3)不難發(fā)現(xiàn),包含著銜接手段、事實陳述以及數(shù)字證據(jù)的支持句不可避免地成為了復雜句或者復合句,其中富含各種從句、并列句和非謂語動詞,與概括句構成語法現(xiàn)象豐富的段落,這對于評分標準中的任務回應程度、連貫流暢性和語法的多樣性都是直接的應對方式,同時也為詞匯的變化盡可能地創(chuàng)造了機會,或者說留出了空間,畢竟描述事實時語言的施展空間要大得多。當然,任何主觀臆斷都不能出現(xiàn)在小作文的寫作中,這仍然是不可挑戰(zhàn)的原則。

訓練方法:口述文章結構結合單句練習。

在上述結構框架下的小作文數(shù)據(jù)類圖表的練習會更有效率和效果。

1)依據(jù)真題,從分段開始訓練文章結構,每道題目限時2分鐘,要求學生在此時間內(nèi)看懂圖表,找出數(shù)據(jù)特征并合理分段。

2)口述(可以雙語進行)通篇八、九句話的敘述次序和重點,要求結合銜接詞的使用;

3)抽出任意一句話要求學生進行單句寫作練習。

4)依據(jù)考試時間安排在試前兩周到一個月的時間進行強化練習(通篇限時練習)保持狀態(tài)。

雅思g類書信小作文范文 解釋信:給保險公司

describe the item you lost

explain how you lost it

tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

雅思g類書信小作文范文范文:從爺爺那里繼承的金表在酒店里丟失,所以向保險公司咨詢。

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to make an insurance claim for an item that I lost while on holiday last week.

The item is a wristwatch that I inherited from my grandfather. Both the watch strap and the face are made of gold, and the watch is worth a considerable amount of money. It also has great sentimental value.

I believe that I must have left the watch on the beach in front of the hotel where I was staying. I did return to search for it, but I can only assume that it was either covered in sand or that it had been washed out to sea.

I took out comprehensive travel insurance with your company, and my contract states that all lost items are covered. I would therefore ask that you review the attached information regarding the estimated value of the watch, and that you process my claim as quickly as possible.

Please let me know if you require any further information.

Yours faithfully,

Paul Jones(170)

雅思g類書信小作文范文 答復信:面對朋友的工作邀約

雅思g類書信小作文話題

你的一位好友要求你作為他的新買賣的伙伴,面對這個工作offer,請寫信答復。

One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new business. Write a letter to reply to your friend's offer. In your letter

give your opinion of your friend's business idea

tell him whether or not you have decided to accept his offer

and explain your reasons for this decision.

雅思g類書信小作范文

Dear John,

I hope you're well. Thanks for giving me some time to think about your business proposal.

First, let me just say that I think it would be a great idea to open a café on the high street.It definitely makes sense since there are no other cafés in the area.

Having said that, I'm afraid I'm going to have to turn your offer down. I've thought long and hard about this decision, and I just dont think it's the right time for me to get involved with a big project like this.

To be honest, I would struggle to find enough money to cover my share of the initial investment costs. Also, I don't really want to leave my current job, and I think it would be impossible for me to commit to

the café project while I'm still working full-time.

Best of luck with the café. I'm sure you'll make a success of it without me!

Speak soon

Chris(162)

雅思g類書信小作文范文 投訴信:寫給商店經(jīng)理

雅思g類書信小作文話題

為你的廚房買了一個設備,但立馬出問題了。你致電商鋪,沒有任何實質(zhì)回應,所以,你要寫信給商鋪經(jīng)理。

You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken.

Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter

describe the problem with the equipment

explain what happened when you phoned the shop

say what you would like the manager to do

雅思g類書信小作文范文

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing with regard to an appliance that I recently bought from your shop.

On the 10th May I bought a new washing machine, and it was installed the following day. However, when I tried to wash some clothes, I noticed that the machine failed to spin during the washing cycle. Consequently, it leaves clothes wet but not clean.

When I phoned your shop to report the problem, I spoke to an assistant who did not know the procedure for repairs or returns. He assured me that he would report the issue to the store manager, and that I would be contacted the same day. That was two days ago, and I am still waiting for your call.

As the appliance is under warranty, I am entitled to ask for it to be repaired or replaced. I have decided that I would like a replacement washing machine. I would also like you to phone me personally when you receive this letter.

I await your prompt response.

Yours faithfully,

John Smith (175 words)


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